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People living in 21st century generally have better quality of lives than people born in earlier centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a lot of development that has been taken in the past couple of years, both in terms of technology
as well as
 the
lifestyle
 of the people. Some people state there is quality of
life
while
 others oppose it. In my point of view, these developments
has
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 drastically changed the quality
our
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 lives.
To begin
 with, the advancement in technology, machinery and
lifestyle
 has always been on the run and changes are required to be updated in
life
.
Furthermore
,
development
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 in applications and electronic gadgets have simplified our lives, which solves our problems in just a click. Apart from that there has been a lot of globalization in
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recent years, resulting in higher income and
better
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 standard of living.
For instance
,
microwave
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 helps in reheating
the
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food within
couple
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 of minutes and is
time saving
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.
On the contrary
, many other individuals believe that these changes have hampered
the
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physical movement and
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also
 a reason for obesity.
Moreover
, the easy and ready-made food available is causing many health issues.
Additionally
, competitiveness for
better
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 standard of
lifestyle
 has developed jealousy and enemyship among
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fellow co-workers.The employees tend to spend more hours working and share less family time.
According to
the
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 recent survey taken at Amazon, 45% of the employees work on holidays with a view to
earn
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 more. To sum it up, I believe both men and women are working in order to secure more financial stability and improved standards of
life
. The change in the
lifestyle
 pattern of individuals
have
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 exceptionally replaced the olden norms of
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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