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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.
#show #favourite #takeaways #people #canada #indian #restaurants
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of popular takeaways of people,
while
 the bar chart gives information about the
amount
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 of
Indian
 restaurants in Canada from 1960 to 2015.
Overall
, Chinese and
Indian
 can be seen most popular takeout kind of
food
 to Canadians,
while
 the amount of
Indian
 restaurants
steady
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steadily
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 rose over the period given.
The
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apply
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Chinese
food
were
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was
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most
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the most
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 favourite
takeaways
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takeaway
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food
, with over
third,
and
second
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the second
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 high popular
food
 was
Indian
food
was
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26%.
However
, The three kinds of takeout
food
 which are Greek, Japanese and Mexican accounted for
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the remarkable
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remarkable
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 lowest, at just 1% respectively compared to other
countries
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countries'
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food
. The number of
Indian
 restaurants started lowest
around
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at around
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 500 in 1960, and
steady
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steadily
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 rose until 1970. In 1997,
India
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Indian
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food
 was getting popular significantly to 7900 and
then
rough
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roughly
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 increased by 2100 in 2009. Next two years, the number of
India
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Indian
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food
business
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businesses
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 decreased slightly, but kept the business
about
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at about
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 9000, In 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indian, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • favourite takeaways
  • people in Canada
  • number of Indian restaurants
  • 1960
  • 2015
  • types of takeaways
  • popular
  • 55 years
  • country
  • time frame
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