Nowadays, the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
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being changed
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changing
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loss
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the loss
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apply
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relying
are
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has
community
.
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the community
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the interaction among individuals has Change preposition
in
adverse
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an adverse
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on
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
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inter- personal
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inter-personal
relationship
between parents and children. Cumulative utilization of electronic devices for video games Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
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in
long
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the long
make
teenagers apart from family bonding, which leads to Change the verb form
makes
discourage
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discouraging
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them to
to learn
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from learning
as well as
disrespect to their parents. Linking Words
Secondly
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make
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makes
people
avoid Use synonyms
from
each other and Change preposition
apply
stay
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get
stick
with smartphones or computers to communicate or to entertain without paying Wrong verb form
stuck
their
attention to the vicinity. Correct pronoun usage
apply
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this
development has Linking Words
been
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apply
on
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apply
their
various connections in their life.
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impact
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impacted
this
way brings more drawbacks to Linking Words
the
personal lives, Correct article usage
apply
such
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descreasing
interaction with juveniles Correct your spelling
decreasing
of
their adults would be Change preposition
apply
high
risk Change preposition
at high
on
substance abuse because of loss of attention with their guardience might bring them more freedom to the kids allowing them to practice bad habits. Change preposition
of
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, being Linking Words
weked
social connection Correct your spelling
worked
make
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makes
from
social responsibilities, Change preposition
apply
such
as engaging Linking Words
charity
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in charity
works
, which is essential to community Fix the agreement mistake
work
existance
. Correct your spelling
existence
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people
in most developed countries tend to live individually as nuclear families without conducting any bond with others. Use synonyms
Therefore
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this
evolution has brought many disadvantages to the Linking Words
people
and community.
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according to
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are influenced
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influence
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apply
the
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apply
public
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the public
and
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apply
further
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loss
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this
relationships lead teen to addict drugs and Correct determiner usage
these
people
apart from social responsibilities, which Use synonyms
are demonstrated
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demonstrates
negative
impact.Correct article usage
a negative
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