Nowadays, the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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advent
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the advent
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of technology,
people
are
being changed
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changing
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their relationships with others and
this
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illustrates
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precisely by
loss
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the loss
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of connection between parents and children
due to
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video games,
as well as
social isolation
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on social media usage, which
are
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made tremendous effect on
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the community
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. To commence with, being changed
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the interaction among individuals has
adverse
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an adverse
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impact
to
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the
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society.
Firstly
, loss of
inter- personal
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inter-personal
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relationship
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relationships
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between parents and children. Cumulative utilization of electronic devices for video games
for
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in
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long
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the long
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run
make
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teenagers apart from family bonding, which leads to
discourage
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discouraging
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them to
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to learn
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from learning
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,
as well as
disrespect to their parents.
Secondly
, addiction to social media constantly
make
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people
avoid
from
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each other and
stay
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get
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stick
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stuck
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with smartphones or computers to communicate or to entertain without paying
their
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attention to the vicinity.
Consequently
,
this
development has
been
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affected
on
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their
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various connections in their life.
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, being
impact
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impacted
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often in
this
way brings more drawbacks to
the
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apply
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personal lives,
such
as
descreasing
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decreasing
interaction with juveniles
of
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their adults would be
high
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at high
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risk
on
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substance abuse because of loss of attention with their guardience might bring them more freedom to the kids allowing them to practice bad habits.
Moreover
, being
weked
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worked
social connection
make
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makes
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pole avoid
from
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social responsibilities,
such
as engaging
charity
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in charity
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works
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work
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, which is essential to community
existance
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existence
.
For instance
,
people
in most developed countries tend to live individually as nuclear families without conducting any bond with others.
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,
this
evolution has brought many disadvantages to the
people
and community.
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according to
the above clarification, evolved innovations
are influenced
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to
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the
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personal lives to deterorate bond with children and among
public
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the public
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and
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further
, being
lost
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of
this
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these
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relationships lead teen to addict drugs and
people
apart from social responsibilities, which
are demonstrated
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negative
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a negative
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impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interact
  • technology
  • relationship
  • connectivity
  • virtual
  • communication skills
  • dependency
  • access
  • information
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
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