Some people think high school graduates should work or travel for period of time instead of going directly to study to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge on experience.
Number
of individuals suppose that Change the article
A number
The number
student
, who Fix the agreement mistake
students
are intended
to attend campus, must be engaged with travelling and Wrong verb form
intend
part time
jobs for Add a hyphen
part-time
considerable
duration prior to Correct article usage
a considerable
the
higher Correct article usage
apply
education
, which brings few
benefits Correct article usage
a few
such
as being able to understand reality and ability take
responsibility Wrong verb form
taking
along with
some drawbacks. Namely, being habitual to avoid from
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apply
education
, as well as
being money minded
. Add a hyphen
money-minded
This
essay will elaborate this
phenomenon profoundly.
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on this
To begin
with, being obligated with tours would be positive
development Correct article usage
a positive
due to
the being
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apply
confident
to confront Replace the word
confidence
challengers
as they practice Correct your spelling
challenges
while
they are travelling constantly, which may be significance
to accept the learning goals as well. Replace the word
significant
Furthermore
, working before the
tertiary Correct article usage
apply
education
might be influenced
to convince regarding reality of Wrong verb form
influence
the
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apply
life
, as well as
money
management which crucial
to Add a missing verb
is crucial
the
future Correct article usage
apply
life
. For instance
, most students, who came
from Wrong verb form
come
the
poor families, are more Correct article usage
apply
succeed
in their Replace the word
successful
carriers
as they Correct your spelling
careers
qualified
with social perception and Wrong verb form
qualify
economical
balance, as they Replace the word
economic
had
survived Wrong verb form
have
independendently
during their learning period Correct your spelling
independently
compare
to the pupils, who are possed Wrong verb form
compared
to
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apply
the
rich families because they do not have Correct article usage
apply
life
and social experience.
However
, this
concept comprising
a few cons as well. If Wrong verb form
comprises
individual
had worked Add an article
an individual
the individual
higher
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in higher
education
in advance might b
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have
exaggerate
his intention to earn Wrong verb form
exaggerated
money
than
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rather than
education
, which could be
Verb problem
have
abandoned
Wrong verb form
abandon
own
university goals. Correct pronoun usage
his own
Moreover
, although
engaging with tours might be positive
development, there are some negative effects as well, Add an article
a positive
such
as concentrate
Wrong verb form
concentrating
marely
on Correct your spelling
more
joyful
Correct article usage
a joyful
life
instead
of studying would be tremendous. For example
, in my campus life
, there were several friends, who were willing to work and visit many locations often, left
their graduation, Wrong verb form
leaving
due to
being money oriented
, Add a hyphen
money-oriented
as well as
being over enjoyable. As a result
, this
would be adverse
impact on Add an article
an adverse
someones
Change to a genitive case
someone's
life
.
To conclude
, although
being engage
with tours and carriers would be pros for teenagers, Wrong verb form
engaged
such
as being courageous, as well as
enhance
resilience, there are several adverse effects, Wrong verb form
enhancing
such
as being money minded
and Add a hyphen
money-minded
over
joyful Replace the word
overly
as
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apply
that
.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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