Some people think high school graduates should work or travel for period of time instead of going directly to study to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge on experience.
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part-time
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a positive
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confidence
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challenges
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influence
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succeed
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successful
carriers
as they Correct your spelling
careers
qualified
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qualify
economical
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had
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independently
compare
to the pupils, who are possed Wrong verb form
compared
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apply
the
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life
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an individual
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in higher
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his intention to earn Wrong verb form
exaggerated
money
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rather than
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be
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have
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abandon
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his own
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a positive
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concentrating
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on Correct your spelling
more
joyful
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a joyful
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instead
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left
their graduation, Wrong verb form
leaving
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money-oriented
as well as
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an adverse
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To conclude
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engaged
such
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as well as
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such
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money minded
and Add a hyphen
money-minded
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apply
that
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apply
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