Some people think high school graduates should work or travel for period of time instead of going directly to study to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge on experience.

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of individuals suppose that
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students
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, who
are intended
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to attend campus, must be engaged with travelling and
part time
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jobs for
considerable
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duration prior to
the
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higher
education
, which brings
few
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benefits
such
as being able to understand reality and
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responsibility
along with
some drawbacks. Namely, being habitual to avoid
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education
,
as well as
being
money minded
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.
This
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phenomenon profoundly.
To begin
with, being obligated with tours would be
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development
due to
the
being
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confident
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confidence
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to confront
challengers
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challenges
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as they practice
while
they are travelling constantly, which may be
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to accept the learning goals as well.
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, working before
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tertiary
education
might
be influenced
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to convince regarding reality of
the
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life
,
as well as
money
management which
crucial
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is crucial
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to
the
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future
life
.
For instance
, most students, who
came
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from
the
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poor families, are more
succeed
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successful
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in their
carriers
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careers
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as they
qualified
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with social perception and
economical
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balance, as they
had
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survived
independendently
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independently
during their learning period
compare
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compared
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to the pupils, who are possed
to
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the
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rich families because they do not have
life
and social experience.
However
,
this
concept
comprising
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a few cons as well. If
individual
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an individual
the individual
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had worked
higher
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in higher
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education
in advance might
b
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have
exaggerate
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his intention to earn
money
than
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rather than
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education
, which could
be
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abandoned
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abandon
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own
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his own
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university goals.
Moreover
,
although
engaging with tours might be
positive
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a positive
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development, there are some negative effects as well,
such
as
concentrate
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marely
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more
on
joyful
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a joyful
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life
instead
of studying would be tremendous.
For example
, in my campus
life
, there were several friends, who were willing to work and visit many locations often,
left
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leaving
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their graduation,
due to
being
money oriented
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money-oriented
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,
as well as
being over enjoyable.
As a result
,
this
would be
adverse
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an adverse
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impact on
someones
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someone's
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life
.
To conclude
,
although
being
engage
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engaged
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with tours and carriers would be pros for teenagers,
such
as being courageous,
as well as
enhance
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resilience, there are several adverse effects,
such
as being
money minded
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money-minded
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and
over
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overly
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joyful
as
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apply
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that
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apply
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.
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