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The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar charts depict the comparison of
an
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 occupation status of
graduates
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 and postgraduates in the UK
wo
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who
 did not work as
a
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apply
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full-time blue-collar
worker
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workers
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 in 2008. Upon initial observation, it is clear from the graphs that the predominant portion of students from both of the categories promoted to continue the
cirriculum
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curriculum
,
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 voluntary work
contemplated
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was contemplated
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 as
a
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the
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 least favourable choice among all.
According to
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 what is given,
it is clear that
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 the paramount number of students preferred to carry on their studies, accounting for just under 30,000 and 2,775 for
graduates
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 and post-
graduates
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.
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, the evidence for part-time work classification is indistinguishable as being the second most popular choice reckoning 17,735 for
graduates
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 and just over 2,5 thousand for post-
graduates
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 as well.
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, voluntary labour is completely nonidentical in comparison with the others, indicating a great divergence between groups with 10 times difference estimating 3,5 thousand and 345 people
as well as
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 unemployment categorization with 16,235 and 1,625 for
graduates
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 and post-
graduates
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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