In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching another planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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elaborates on the idea that it would become more exhausting to stay on land. So, we should extend our boundaries towards other planets in the search for livelihood
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as Mars.
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I totally agree that terrestrial life has become increasingly difficult , I do not agree with investing money in finding a new planet to live
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On one hand, I agree that life these days is not as simple as that of the past. It is mainly
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the adverse change in the environmental condition
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affecting humankind. In urban areas, the use of natural resources
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as petrol, diesel, oil, natural gases, etc. has increased consumption leading to the vast release of carbon dioxide.
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, the air gets contaminated causing severe health problems
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as asthma, respiratory diseases, skin infection, cancer, etc. Now, as the is a boost in carbon dioxide the heating effect is all over the gravel resulting in the melting of the ice in the Atlantic Ocean causing the land to shrink. Eventually, Mother Earth suffered a lot
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mankind's invention.
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, we can
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extend our hands in saving the turf just by implementing an eco-friendly way to transform it into a better place to live.
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of investing a large amount of money in search of a new,
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we should initiate a plethora of new initiatives.
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, minimize the utilization of fossil fuels and invest in green energy which is clean energy with no risk of emission.
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, several campaigns highlight the importance of the environment and introduce new ways to reduce pollution, distinguishing between the right way of utilising energy
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by planting trees which will basically lower the risk of pollution.
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, these steps will make the surface the best place to survive. Standing by my opinion, I will conclude that even though the land has some manmade consequences created by mankind themselves overcoming the problem with the best solution will make the coast again a better place to live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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