Society is based on rules and law. If individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. It could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#society #rules #law #individuals #function

Nowadays, nations have

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freedom to act, live, and do whatever they

wanted

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. Sometimes, the actions

itself is

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themselves

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contradict

with

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the rules

that

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will damage their habits and

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could not be useful. In

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essay, I totally agree that

mandate

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is a crucial thing that everyone should obey by raising

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awareness and

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self-control.

Firstly

, people should

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that what they do is always bound by regulations.

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, they

would

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move carefully and

afraid

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doing

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making

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mistakes.

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transportations

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transportation

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in Jakarta is

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out by

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CCTV to maintain

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speed, if there are

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citizens who

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the maximum velocity, they will be ticketed by the police and get a fine of Rp5,000,000.

Therefore

, it is very important to comply with all the

legislations

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However

, there are still many community who does not feel guilty if they breaks the law because their feelings are controlling them so a lot of information in Indonesia regarding the murder emerged.

For instance

, a college student from Universitas Indonesia killed his friend just because jealous of his friend's achievements.

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, it was a heinous step that could never forgotten by

the

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society and he

can

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receive severe sanctions

such

as being killed. In conclusion, rules are created to be obeyed by everyone because we are a

democracy

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country. We are human who needs to have

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strict etiquette to avoid problems. In the future, I believe the vast majority of bodies will realize how essential systems are in our lives.

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