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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart
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, the
salary
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 comparison for" police, nurse, firefighter and underground driver" in the UK when they are started and their
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 after three years.
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The
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 table presents the average working
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 per
week
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 for each role.
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, we see from the information we have that there is a slight increase in the salaries after three years.
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, the highest
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 was for underground drivers and the lowest for nurses.
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, the high average of working
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 per
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 was for firefighters. In terms of
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, the chart shows a rise of around 1% for underground drivers, firefighters and nurses (50000 to 51000, 40000 to 41ooo and 18000 to 19000 pounds respectively).
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 the police
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 gradually from 21000 to 23000 pounds.
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, firefighters had the most extended about 55 working
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 per
week
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.
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, the underground drivers had the lowest about 36 working
hours
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 per
week
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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