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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
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, the
salary
 comparison for" police, nurse, firefighter and underground driver" in the UK when they are started and their
salary
 after three years.
While the
Correct word choice
The
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 table presents the average working
hours
 per
week
 for each role.
Overall
, we see from the information we have that there is a slight increase in the salaries after three years.
Furthermore
, the highest
salary
 was for underground drivers and the lowest for nurses.
On the other hand
, the high average of working
hours
 per
week
 was for firefighters. In terms of
salary
, the chart shows a rise of around 1% for underground drivers, firefighters and nurses (50000 to 51000, 40000 to 41ooo and 18000 to 19000 pounds respectively).
While
 the police
grow
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grew
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 gradually from 21000 to 23000 pounds.
Moreover
, firefighters had the most extended about 55 working
hours
 per
week
.
However
, the underground drivers had the lowest about 36 working
hours
 per
week
.
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