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Write about the following topic: A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that These days governments spend a lot of money in searching for oil. The question is, why they didn’t change their minds and invest more in renewable sources of
energy
? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the effect of directing the investment
resources
 to solar and wind
energy
instead
 of oil. It’s eco-friendly, non-pollutant to the environment and renewable
energy
resources
 rather than oil
energy
. In terms of problems, the
energy
 generated from oils and other fossil fuels like natural gas
in addition
, to its harmful effect on the eco-system is going to be finished
Consequently
, in
this
 ,case the global economy would be affected if it happened without the availability of another source of
energy
 that could compensate the oils. In terms of advantages, Investing in
such
 renewable sources of
energy
 allowed all countries to reduce pollution levels and keep the green effect on the environment. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is the concept of sustainability and keeping some of the
resources
 for the coming generations. To illustrate the investment in renewable sources of
energy
 would impact positively the environmental, economic and industrial levels as well. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that recommends more focus from the countries on directing their
resources
 towards clean
energy
 generated from renewable
resources
 of
energy
instead
 of traditional ones like oils which will run out sooner or later. So the alternative availability became a must.
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