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The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020. The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020.

The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020. The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020.
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The Data provide information about the size of foreign
migrants
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 in five
countries
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 during a 20-year period and their share in each country's
population
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.
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, the
number
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 of foreign
migrants
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 increased in
the
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Germany the UK and the USA where the
number
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 of
migrants
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 was higher. The two
countries
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 with the lowest percentage of
migrants
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 India and Russia experienced a decline in immigration over the period.
It is clear that
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 the three
countries
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 demonstrated a high upward trend in migrant
population
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 over time, the largest
number
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 of
migrants
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 lived in the USA around 35
million
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 in 2000 and 50
million
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 in 2020. It was the UK which showed the highest
number
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 of growth from 5
million
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 to around 9.5
million
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 over 20 year period. In ,Germany,
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 trend is about 8
million
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 and 11
million
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 in 2000 and 2020 respectively. Both India and Russia experienced a decline in their migrant
population
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 by 2020 falling to approximately 5
million
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 and 11
million
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 respectively. In 2020 the same three
countries
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 the UK, the USA and Germany had an identical share in the total size of the National
population
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 about an average of 14%
whereas
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 India's 0.4% and Russia's 8.1% were significantly lower.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words migrants, countries, population, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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