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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree?

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In a large proportion of the world, the consumption of junk
food
 is being added to
people
's daily lifestyle which provides
unfavorable
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 impacts on their bodies.I totally agree with
this
 viewpoint as it makes an individual obese and
lathargic
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lethargic
 for their whole life which will be discussed in detail in upcoming paragraphs. obesity is the first and foremost reason which affects the health of an individual to a high extent.By eating junk
food
 ,
a
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 human body consumes all the
non nutritious
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 ingredients inside
their
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the
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 body
such
 as bad
cholestrol
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cholesterol
,fat and non-healthy minerals.Upland
people
 residing in Duncan
is
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an
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 prime example,where lack of healthy sourced meals forces
people
 to consume outside meals on a regular basis.
Secondly
,laziness could be observed in humans who
ignores
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 healthy
food
 and consume outside
food
 for their regular diet.
People
 tend to ignore cooking
food
at
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in
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 their
household
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 as they think that it is a
time consuming
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 process.
For instance
, A study in Sweden in 2019 found that 80% of the population came under the parties
who
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 have
higher
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a higher
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 rate of consumption of junk
food
 as compared to 2018 which clearly states the couch-potato
scenerio
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scenario
 in
whole
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the whole
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 country.
To conclude
,undoubtedly, junk-
food
had
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has
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 an adverse effect on all
people
 of the world as not only it builds stubborn fat in
human
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the human
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 body but
also
make
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 them tired all day.
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