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Children in rural areas are being left behind in their academic development.why is this the case . What solution can you suggest

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The younger generations that are located in remote
areas
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 of the city, tend to have difficulty in terms of higher
education
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 for academic
development
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 purposes.
This
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 occurred caused of the remote area
that is
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 hard to
access
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 from the outer world. I hold the view that governments should build a good base of
infrastructure
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 like
transportation
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facilities
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 for
education
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 equally both for city and rural
areas
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.
Firstly
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, countryside
areas
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 tend to have slow
development
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.
This
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 matter is mainly caused by poor
transportation
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 and the lack of streets that reach remote
areas
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.
Furthermore
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, it can lead to distract the
development
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 of infrastructures like
education
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facilities
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.
For example
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, in Indonesia, a survey from The Ministry of
Education
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, Culture, and Research concludes that there are more schools built in Java than in other islands in Indonesia.
This
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 matter is in line with the
development
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infrastructure
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 that only existed in Java massively for the past two decades. The governments should think about building
facilities
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 that support academic
development
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 equally not only in big cities. More and more basic
infrastructure
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 like
access
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transportation
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 to the countryside should be considered as a first step. It will be automatically followed by other
infrastructure
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 to be constructed. One of the priorities is academic building like schools and libraries. In conclusion, in order to develop an academic field in rural
areas
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, the governments should look to constructing a basic
infrastructure
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 first to give easy
access
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 to remote
areas
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. Later, academic
facilities
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 will emerge when the rural area has good
access
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 to
transportation
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.
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