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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates information
the
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on the
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 change in
prices
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 of
average
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an average
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of
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apply
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Copper
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, Nickel and Zinc in 2014, with data presented
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at monthyly
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monthyly
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monthly
interval
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intervals
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 and on
percentage
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a percentage
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 scale.
Overall
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, all kinds
average
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of average
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prices
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 decreased from
January
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 to June.
However
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, the
prices
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 increased between June and December again. When it
come
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 to Nickel. That had the most significantly changed
prices
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 more than
Copper
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 and Zinc
prices
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.
The
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Nickel's
prices
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had
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were
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 6% in
January
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. And, the figure decreased to -3% in June. And
then
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, the
prices
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 had
big
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a big
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 jump from -2% to 1% in November. When it
come
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comes
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 to
Copper
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. the
Copper
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 had little changed average
prices
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daring
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during
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 one year. It had 2% in
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january
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January
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.
Also
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, their
prices
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 had
change
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changed
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 to -1% in May, But, their
prices
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decreasde
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decrease
decreased
about
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by about
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 1.5% in December. In
addtion
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addition
,
the
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apply
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Zinc's average
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prices
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price
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 was 1% in
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january
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January
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,
However
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, their
prices
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 3% in February. And
then
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, the
prices
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increasde
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increase
increased
 to -1% during
4months
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4 months
. But their
prices
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big
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apply
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jumped from -1% to 2% in November.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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