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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates information
the
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 change in
prices
 of
average
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an average
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of
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apply
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Copper
, Nickel and Zinc in 2014, with data presented
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at monthyly
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monthyly
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monthly
interval
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intervals
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 and on
percentage
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a percentage
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 scale.
Overall
, all kinds
average
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of average
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prices
 decreased from
January
 to June.
However
, the
prices
 increased between June and December again. When it
come
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 to Nickel. That had the most significantly changed
prices
 more than
Copper
 and Zinc
prices
.
The
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Nickel's
prices
had
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were
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 6% in
January
. And, the figure decreased to -3% in June. And
then
, the
prices
 had
big
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a big
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 jump from -2% to 1% in November. When it
come
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comes
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 to
Copper
. the
Copper
 had little changed average
prices
daring
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during
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 one year. It had 2% in
january
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January
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.
Also
, their
prices
 had
change
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changed
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 to -1% in May, But, their
prices
decreasde
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decrease
decreased
about
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by about
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 1.5% in December. In
addtion
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addition
,
the
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apply
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Zinc's average
prices
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price
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 was 1% in
january
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January
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,
However
, their
prices
decrease
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decreased
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 to 3% in February. And
then
, the
prices
increasde
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increase
increased
 to -1% during
4months
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4 months
. But their
prices
big
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jumped from -1% to 2% in November.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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