The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The table provides information on the proportion of
household
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electrical
appliances
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owned by people in Britain over an eleven-
year
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period
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. Over time, it can be established that the
ownership
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fo
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of
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household
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appliance
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appliances
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has increased over the
period
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. The highest
ownership
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of
appliances
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is central heating, which doubled the figures by the end of the
period
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with the addition of a few
appliances
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(telephone, washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner)
has
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witnessed a strong increase
year
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on
year
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. The two
appliances
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with the lowest percentages- video and dishwater experienced no sales in the first few years.
It is clear that
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four
household
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appliances
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witnessed a significant increase in
ownership
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over the
periods
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period
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. By far, the largest number of people owning central heating has nearly doubled from thirty-three per
cent
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in 1972 to sixty-four per
cent
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in 1983. It was the
ownership
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of the telephone,
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however
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that witnessed the highest growth rate
year
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on
year
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, with an average rate of more than 6% that almost doubled the initial figures. Television had the highest
ownership
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of 93% in 1972 with fluctuations throughout the
period
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before ending at 98%,
whereas
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the statistics figures for households owning vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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were at 87 per
cent
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in 1972, an increase of 8 per
cent
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before the end of the
period
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.
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, Both dishwasher and video appliance was the
last
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owned by
household
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throughout the
period
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, with some
period
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witnessing no sales. The dishwasher had
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sales in 1978 of just three per
cent
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, which remained constant with slight increases before ending with two per
cent
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more than it
initially
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began with.
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, video
appliances
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did not see any fluctuations or changes with only 18% of
ownership
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at the end
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of the
period
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household, appliances, period, ownership, year, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer durables
  • Annual trends
  • Ownership percentage
  • Notable increases/decreases
  • Milestones
  • Initial/final ownership
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant changes
  • Overall trend
  • Shifts in ownership
  • Patterns in data
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Implications
  • Data highlights
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