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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in other country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opininos.

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There is a
trend
 of
professionals
such
 as doctors and engineers working overseas rather than serving in the country where they are trained.
Although
 there are some concerns, I believe
this
 is a positive
trend
. On the one hand, some people doubt that the
trend
 of
the
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professionals
 working overseas forces the nation to
suffter
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suffer
 from brain drain. Talent people move
of
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emigrants to other
countries
 to
seak
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seek
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another jobs
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.
Moreover
,
the
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professionals
such
 as doctors and engineers might not used to the
foregin
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foreign
 industry since the
the
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system might have a large
differene
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different
to
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from
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 the country where they did their training. The
professionals
 might lose their efficiency and accuracy
while
 facing different industry
pattern
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patterns
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.
However
, these are not something that cannot be solved. The government plays a vital role in making sure that the
professionals
 are well-paid and
recived
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received
receive
 complete social welfare and set up
regular
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 basis to
remaind
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remind
remain
 overseas workers' working qualities.
On the other hand
, different
countries
 can exchange their diverse experiences
while
 letting the
professionals
 work in different regions.
For example
, doctors might meet new diseases in other
countries
then
 bring new
treatment
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treatments
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 back to their own
countries
 and improve the whole medical system in the future.
Furthermore
, sometimes life has stagnated into a set of routines and
need
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needs
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 a change. People are forced to think outside the box
while
 working overseas, which
open
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opens
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 a door for them to expand learning to other aspects.
In other words
, working overseas not only
broaden
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professionals
' horizons on different global perspectives but
also
bring
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brings
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 large potential positive impacts to the nation. On the whole, I indicate that the
professionals
 should
allow
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be allowed
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 to work freely in
other country
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another country
other countries
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 if they hope.
Although
 the
trend
 of the
professionals
work
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working
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 overseas brings several concerns, the positive impact which was brought from it, the advantages of the development outweigh the disadvantages.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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