Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In
this
day and age, people decide to go to the gym
is
the best way to keep fit Correct your spelling
as
while
others think there are more effective measures. This
writer will elucidate in the following essays that
why Correct pronoun usage
apply
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
methods
are more effective.
Firstly
, let us take a look at going to the gym
is not as effective as other methods
, at the gym
there are a lot of facilities for all the exercises and instructors who will introduce gymers
Correct your spelling
gamers
Change preposition
to the
the
best way to practice but if they want to have Change preposition
to the
this
bargain, they will have to pay money for each month, that also
cost too much. For instance
, people who are practising at the gym
need to pay a
tuition every month and must go to the fitness Correct article usage
apply
center
daily. Change the spelling
centre
In addition
, this
statement leads to when inhabitants are busy for some days that they will lost
Change the verb form
lose
their
money that they have Change the pronoun
the
payed
. Correct your spelling
paid
Nevertheless
, going to the gym
provide
citizensChange the verb form
provides
a
fit and slim body with muscles, healthy.
Add the preposition
with a
On the other hand
, exercising with another measure
which are free Fix the agreement mistake
other measures
such
as jogging, Correct word choice
or do
do
Wrong verb form
doing
the
yoga at home, Correct article usage
apply
also
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
a
Change preposition
to a
heath
lifestyle because both of Correct your spelling
healthy
this
Correct determiner usage
these
methods
have an impact on all of bodies like muscles, heath, endocrine
. Research has found that Correct word choice
and endocrine
gym
concentrates on improve
muscles and Change the verb form
improving
shape
of bodies, people nowadays Correct article usage
the shape
are focus
on how to exercise amelioratively for all body organs. On top of that, it is not necessary to pay money and inhabitants not be bound by time Change the verb form
are focused
are focusing
can
practice Correct word choice
and can
everywhere
any time they want. Jogging is the easiest exercise for all ages.
Taking everything into conclusion, Rephrase
anywhere
gym
or another
Replace the adjective
another method
other methods
methods
have their advantages and disadvantages but it can be seen that not only gym
is the best way to stay fit. I inclined to others
measures than going to the Correct quantifier usage
other
gym
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