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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

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The issue of whether educational institutions should have free
tuition
fees
 for everyone is open debate. In spite of the expensive
tuition
fees
, I believe that paying for studies shows the responsibilities of learners. With the development of science and technology, the education field witnessed
the
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significant changes
of
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 quality that impact
on
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the
tuition
fees
 of learners. These
fees
 are invested
on
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 the upgrade facilities and payment for teachers to ensure good conditions for
students
such
 as modern laboratories, technology devices
as well as
 many professionals in many fields. In fact,
this
 expensive cost creates barriers to some people's access to knowledge
while
 the study is encouraged by everyone.
However
, the government and individuals have had many charities for
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poor
students
 who have many outstanding achievements to continue their study path. Thanks to that,
students
used
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 effectively for
this
 support
as well as
this
 self-investment.
In contrast
, free education brings a burden
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 the budget state since universities will expenditure from
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other financial resources
such
 as the medical and health systems.
This
 not only affects people's ability to learn
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 but
also
 threatens their lives because health plays an important role in human life. Granted, free learning will contribute to the balance of knowledge in the community
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 can reduce the gap between the rich and the poor.
Nonetheless
,
this
 sponsorship leads to many people enrolling regardless of whether they are suitable or not and can even easily drop out of school without any harm.
This
 affects the quality of teaching and
lack
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 of responsibility for student learning. In conclusion, free
tuition
 is not impossible but the government and the sponsors should have different policies for each specific group of
students
 to ensure everyone has opportunities to approach knowledge resources from universities.
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