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Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making traditions aimed at tourists, others, however, believe that it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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These days, there is a big debate between
people
 about cultural
traditions
. Some
people
 believe that when we let visitors use it or earn
money
 from it, it can cause lots of damage to them. But
this
 time another side says that there is only one way to prevent our
traditions
 from disappearance, it should be used by
people
 who live in another
country
. In
this
 essay, I will explain both sides and give some opinions on why it would be beneficial. On the one hand,
people
 like their culture,
traditions
, whatever they have in
this
 life so sometimes they do not want to let us other
country
's
people
 because on average more of thousands
people
 visit every
country
 around the
world
. So we do not their goals or why they are visiting one
country
, for ,
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example they may be agents to follow the culture's rules
then
 destroy it or at least visiting
people
 have a tendency to teach things especially if it is another
country
's traditional things.
Consequently
, the government will struggle to maintain its traditional values
while
 Repairing them.
Secondly
, now we are living changing
world
 so everyone wants to make
money
 and display their culture for all of the
world
 and it is able to bring
money
 and keep cultural value long time. To better understand let me take an example, around the
world
people
 prefer travelling across cultures and seeing their lives, learning
traditions
, and so on if they were once here enjoy being here next time they would bring friends and even neighbourhood too, it means more
money
.
As a result
, the
country
 has become more and more popular, and society has started living easier than before because of visitors. In conclusion, if
people
 had more interest in visiting the
country
, it would bring lots of opportunities like financial, and
people
 learn a second language thanks to them.
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