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Globalisation has had a profound impact on various aspects of our lives, including the economy, culture, and environment. Some people believe that it has brought numerous benefits, while others argue that it has caused more harm than good.

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Over the past
half century
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,
globalisation
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 has increased at an astounding rate, impacting many areas of life in most of the world’s
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. Some
people
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 think that
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 has been largely positive but others take the opposite view.
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 essay will look at both points and say that it is hard to decide because both the positives and negatives are significant.
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 has undoubtedly had some hugely positive impacts on the world. By bringing
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 together and tying economies into a global network, the likelihood of war has diminished significantly.
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 wars still occur, they are far less common and tend to be more limited in scope.
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, it has become easier for
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 to
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, allowing for more immigration, more scientific advancements, less poverty, and the proliferation of human rights.
Globalisation
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 could be said to have drastically improved the lives of billions of
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 through the provision of better food, technology, and education.
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, there are clearly drawbacks and these are
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 numerous. First of all,
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 could be said to favour certain
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,
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 as the Western nations whose values are spread throughout the world. It is not only that Western culture and language spreads, but of
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 naturally favours Western corporations and governments, arguably giving them more power.
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 to all that, economic progress in less developed
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 tends to come at the cost of their cultures. As they adopt Western values, they often lose aspects of their own culture,
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 as their values and even their language. An example is that many
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 stop producing traditional music and theatre and
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 attempt to copy Western musical and film styles.
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 makes the world less diverse and perhaps even more materialistic. In conclusion,
globalisation
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 has major benefits but
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 drawbacks. It is hard to say that one outweighs the other because they are both quite significant and
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 would really just be a matter of opinion, with different
people
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 placing importance on different matters.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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