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some people believe that professional such as doctors,engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training.others believe they should be free to work i nanother country if they wish. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #doctors #engineers #work #country #nanother
Professions,
such
 as
,
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 doctors,
engineers
,
etcetra
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etcetera
 play a vital role
for
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in
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 the progress of a
country
,
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 because
country's
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the country's
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well being
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 and architecture
depends
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 on these professions. Some people argue that healthcare professionals and
engineers
 should
work
 in their own
country
, but, on the other
side
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 some masses
thinks
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 that they should move to other countries as well. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss both views and my opinion as well.
To begin
 with, former opinion, if doctors and
engineers
will
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work
 in the
country
 where they trained, they will not only master their skills but
also
 be more comfortable, because they are already familiar with the
work
 and tools.
According to
 the latter view, doctors and
engineers
 can expand their knowledge by moving to another nation. They can knowledge themselves about their culture, about their
work
. In
nutshell
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, it's upon
to
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the people if they want to reside
to
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in
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other place
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another place
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 they can. In my opinion, it's always beneficial for a person to move around places and know about them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • country
  • benefits
  • investment
  • education
  • shortage
  • expertise
  • industry
  • allowing
  • exchange
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • facilitates
  • opportunities
  • international experience
  • increases
  • cultural understanding
  • diversity
  • opinion
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