The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line
graph
illustrates the proportion of the elderly population aged 65 and over in three other countries within a century (1940-2040).
Overall
, the
graph
makes it clear that at the beginning of the given
time
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the percentage of elderly citizens was the lowest in
Japan
while
indicators which depict the
USA
are vice versa. The illustrates show that, in 1940 the number of old people was almost 10 per
cent
in the
USA
and
Sweden
respectively
whereas
it was classified as only 5 per
cent
in
Japan
. By comparing others, there, in
Japan
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there was a slight increase which continued in the next 60 years and after the 2000s it started going up more and more.
That is
the fact that
this
growth will continue growing and in 2040 it will have already been more than 25 per
cent
.
That is
the most sharpened change, which is seen from the
graph
, which leads
Japan
to be at the top of the list. Between the given time
1940
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1940s
,
the
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1990s the increases in numbers continued in both (the
USA
and
Sweden
). Throughout the time, percentages of the
USA
left behind
Sweden
by only 2,3 per
cent
. After 2000, numbers in
Sweden
jumped,
,
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however
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it never took over
Japan
again. The
USA
will have completed the list by just under 25 per
cent
which is the least in the
graph
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, japan, usa, cent, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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