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The detailed description about crime will affect the people and cause many social problems. Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled. Do you agree or disagree?

#description #crime #people #media
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this
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 world,
the
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society is always surrounded by
media
. Some individuals support the fact that
media
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 should cover the information in detail
while
 others are against
this
. In my point of view, I support that
government
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 impose some
filterations
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filters
 to control the information. 2gg 5b
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with
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 the
news
 channels are mainly focusing more on the details of the
crime
 rather than the main subject. Uncensored information can when viewed by kids
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create a traumatizing effect in their minds. Live reporting shows a clear picture of the
crime
 spot and dictates the complete story.
This
 live telecasting when viewed by
the
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young teenagers often results in misleding them, thereby provoking them to do
this
 unlawful act at times of jealousy.
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, a
school going
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 kid enacted a murder
scene
 that he had seen earlier on television. In order to achieve more public rating and accuracy of the
news
,
news
 anchors often cover and release
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report
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 of the
crime
scene
, thereby, giving the criminals a
prehand
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hand
 set of
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idea
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 to erase the
proof’s
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 of their act. Ultimately,
this
 makes
in
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it
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 even more harder for the police department to trace down the criminals.
In addition
 to that, when
news
 channels or
media
reports
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 a
crime
scene
, they
also
 hampers the victim’s privacy.
For instance
,
according to
 a
survery
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survey
 conducted about 35% of
crime
scene
 survivor individuals have voted that their daily life, routine,privacy and
the
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reputation
was
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 put
on
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stake
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 after they have been covered by
media
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the media
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 publically. To sum it all
, I
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 strongly advocate the fact that there should be a limit put by the government and the
media
 officials in order to maintain the decorum of
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society
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