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In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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There is no doubt that these days the need for medical
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 becomes essential for everyone. The question is that if medical
care
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 should be paid for by people or be covered by the
government
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. In
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 ,essay I am going to discuss both opinions and the rationale behind each one. In terms of advantages, the presence of medical
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service
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 which covers all people is a must
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, the conflict is who should pay for
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service
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 Is it fair to make equality in receiving the medical
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 which is covered by the
government
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? My belief is not. The reason given to support
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 claim is the variance in the buying power for
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service
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 between the individual,
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, the governments should provide
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service
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 for individuals with low income and who can not
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.
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, it's not only the
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's responsibility but
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, the charity and social associations. To illustrate those organizations could direct part of their resources towards medical
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 services for the disabled, As the
government
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 should focus more on the projects that should done by itself like education, road construction, etc.
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, if full medical
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 is covered by the
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 it would take a big part of the GDP (the country's
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 income)
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, it would reflect negatively on the other national projects. In conclusion, and based on the previously illustrated points I disagree with the statement,
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that governmental resources should be more directed toward the people who cannot pay for these services only.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • financial distress
  • healthcare inequalities
  • preventive care
  • medical check-ups
  • healthcare system
  • government budgets
  • economic stability
  • quality of care
  • overburdened healthcare facilities
  • efficient management
  • sustainability
  • wastage of resources
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