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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #school #outweigh
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It has always been argued that students ought to start acquiring overseas
languages
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 at an elementary
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 rather than high
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. The merits of
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 notion are more as compared to its demerits and
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 essay shall shed light upon my perspective in subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, why do children begin learning a foreign at primary
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 rather than secondary
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?
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 is because it would be beneficial for learners in
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time
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. Once juveniles get training in foreign dialects at primary
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, they can easily communicate with other
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 who are from different countries with the assistance of
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 they might not only share their culture with them but
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 do a job in other regions if they face difficulties find occupation in their own land.
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,
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 may become multi-lingual. Individuals could help other
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 who visit their countries and tell them about the history of their region as a translator. Paradoxically, the fundamental drawback of
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 statement is that
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 early
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 they have more pressure
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 other subjects
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 as English, Punjabi, Hindi , Drawing and many more
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 they learn non-native
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, it will
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 more burden on children's
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, but the best to learning foreign
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 at secondary
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 as at that
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 they have much mature and they can easily grasp everything because
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 mind moldable.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in India government made policy related to it After matriculation
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 can learn overseas
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 because at that
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 they are able to learn it and it is working successfully.
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 it puts a burden on children because they are not able to learn much at an early age, it gives more advantages in the upcoming
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 can talk with other nation of
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 and share their ideas with them and with the aid of they can gain knowledge.
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