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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The line graph illustrates visits to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 between 1979 and 1999, and the bar graph compares the most popular countries visited by citizens of the
UK
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 in 1999. It is measured in
millions
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
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UK
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number of UK
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residents
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 that visited
the
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apply
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abroad increased significantly,
whereas
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 visits to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 grew slightly towards the end of the year. It can
also
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 be seen that France has the most visitors from
the
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those living in the
UK
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.
To begin
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, the number of people residing in the United Kingdom
that
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who
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travels
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travel
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to
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apply
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the
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apply
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abroad stood at 12
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millions
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million
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 in 1979.
Then
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, it grew dramatically to about 52 over the next twenty years and the overseas
residents
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 that travelled to the
UK
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 began fairly at 10
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millions
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million
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 which later rose minimally to 26
at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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.
Most
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The most
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 popular
countries
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country
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 visited by
residents
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 in the
UK
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 in 1999 was France which had 12
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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UK
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 visitors
and
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which
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 was considerably higher than the other five countries. Followed by Spain which accepted 9
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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individuals living in the
UK
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,
whereas
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 Greece and
USA
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the USA
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 experienced 4 and 3
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millions
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million
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UK
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 immigrants respectively.
Finally
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, Turkey was the least country.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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