The graph below shows the number of people taking part in a wildlife survey in Britain between 2001 and 2009. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in a wildlife survey in Britain between 2001 and 2009. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table provides information about the
number
of individuals involved in
wildlife
surveys during the period from 2001 until 2009 in Britain.
Overall
, each year has a variable which is the
number
of
adults
and children participating in
wildlife
in Britain. Clearly, adult people are more involved in
wildlife
than kids. Between 2001 and 2009 is easy to identify the fluctuation, in 2001 the
number
of
adults
was 36,000. In 2003 the
number
of
adults
increased considerably.
Instead
, in 2005 and 2007 there was a significant growth of about 100,000 more than in the previous years.
Finally
, in 2009 the total of
adults
lowed 61000 in the previous years 2005 and 2007 respectively. Children's variable has a particular tendency. In 2001 just started with 12,000 kids};
then
, between 2003 and 2007 the variable had a low of about 5,000 people.
Finally
, in 2009 kids had the same
number
of participants in
wildlife
than
adults
.
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