The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019,

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graphs
represents
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information about changes
of
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in
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electrical technique and spent time
on
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apply
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doing housework in households in one country over
period
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a period
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of 92 years.
Overall
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percentage of
household
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households
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with technologies increased during
this
period, and the greatest growth
had
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,
furthermore
number of hours decreased dramatically. It can be clearly observed that washing
machine
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machines
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had increased almost all
time
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the time
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, from 40
percent
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until
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approximately75
percent
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, in
1980
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year
it had decreased. Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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did not reach 100
percent
until 2000
year
. It could be noticed that
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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increased significantly until approximately 1980
year
, in
this
year
it reached 100
percent
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and held
this
position until the end. It is interesting to note that
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number of hours of housework per week decreased dramatically from 50 to 15, and
than
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had
decline
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slowly. In 2019 hours per week were 10.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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