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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure, and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Information
technology
 has touched society in a vast amount of aspects
in
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 everyday
lives
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.
This
 essay will explore the pros and cons of
this
 and will conclude with why the benefits carry more weight. Looking at the advantages first of all, computers have made people’s lives much easier, particularly it has been possible to miniaturise objects in comparison to the past.
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, telephones have now become more compact and slimmer over time, as humans demand more portable and hand-free objects, helping people to become more
sufficient
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 and productive. Another advantage is that there is more interconnectivity than ever before. With the assistance of social media applications, people are able to connect with others from all over the world, which is faster than ever before, with citizens sharing
information
 at the speed of light.
This
 has contributed to the betterment of the human race
overall
.
However
, a few challenges exist with the use of
information
technology
. Studies have shown that people have become more reliable and dependent on
smart phones
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 and other devices than ever before as it has made life
easierAs
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easier
a results
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results
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, scientists fear that the human race can be easily controlled, become vulnerable and lost if they ever stop working. Another threat posed by
information
technology
 is the new and potential dangers of
the
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of
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it
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,with hacking being one of the most apparent ones.
This
 is
due to
 millions of people’s
information
 being stored in the cloud and a few criminal organizations have got the ability to access them.
This
 poses a great danger to user privacy becoming compromised. In my opinion, the benefits of
information
technology
 do surpass the disadvantages, for the reason that everyone’s future depends on it very much.
This
 is because it aids humans in thriving, plus a strong foundation is needed for
the
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protection from danger.
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