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Nowadays, more and more people choose to live by themselves. Why is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In
the
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modern society, a growing number of
people
,
in particular
 young
people
, tend to live independently has become an increasingly popular choice. The phenomenon exists for various possible reasons. From my perspective,
this
 is a positive life choice
to
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 individuals and a family. There are certain possible reasons as follows. The
primarily
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 reason is that a huge difference lies between
parents
 and children in a family in terms of living habits and ideas. Living independently helps them avoid domestic conflicts and to gain much space and freedom. In order for better career promotion, young
people
 have to leave their
hometown
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 for big cities since there are abundant resources and job opportunities available for them to draw on.
Thus
, most of them choose to live away from
parents
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their parents
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 in these cities. For academic dream, the increasing number of young
people
 tends to go abroad for
further
 studies. They have no choice but to live alone in a foreign country.
For example
, the USA, Canada, and the UK are the most popular
destination
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 for Chinese young students to study abroad, and they will have to live a detached
live
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 during
the
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this
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 period.
While
this
 independent lifestyle causes some issues,
such
 as young
people
’s irregular living habits and
parents
’ loneliness, in
general
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 it is a positive life trend. For young
people
, they are strongly able to address unexpected problems in daily life independently rather than
to
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rely on their
parents
,
this
 would be beneficial for their mindset development. For
parents
, the more independent young
people
 become, the less pressure their
parents
 would have on their shoulders,
they
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 would be left much time to enjoy their moments after retirement.
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