It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages.

Humans
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believe that if they experienced riskful circumstances, their
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lives
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influence ;
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, others, with taking
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positions, have
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belief that their professional
lives
would include significant benefits. First and
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foremost
for most
, these activities would have merits for them.
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, they could enforce their crafts and abilities especially when
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evaluating their cognitive skills.
Second,
people would have various experiences when they immerse their
lives
into risks, and they would be
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if they came across positive
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consequences
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, If some analysed the whole circumstances, their
lives
would have been rocketed by taking risks to enhance their ones.
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the drawbacks in
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performances,
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of illnesses and stress which results in
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would be
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under pressure.
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, they would lose their
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self-esteem
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self-confidence
if they failed with riskful activities.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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