Nowadays, in many countries people are spending too much on wedding some people think that it is essential to spend huge amount of money on wedding celebration. Other thing that have to be simple and not very grand discuss both views and give your opinion.

In modern human society, numerous citizens argue that the majority of consumers are convinced by commercials in order to purchase more
product
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products
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.
However
,
the
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others agree that we are no longer interested in advertisements which are no
more
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crucial
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my perspective,
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strongly agree with the first statement which will
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explained in
this
essay On the one hand, enterprises hire celebrities to advertise their
products
such
as corporation
clear shampoo
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they
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collaborate
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with
cristiano
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ronaldo soccer player to advertise their new
products
which have
fragrant
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variety.
Furthermore
,through advertisement companies can cause curiosity in
customers
.So that
customers
can be well-informed of both new
products
and attractive deals regarding the
products
they are interested in.
For example
, Lay’s advertises when
customers
purchase
snack
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they can obtain cards.
On the other hand
, covid-19 has caused the global economy into recession.So people decide to save money
instead
of going shopping.
Therefore
, they share the same thought that advertising is pointless and unnecessary even though it is widely shown.On many social media
such
as TV,
website
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and
youtube
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.there is recent research conducted by
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government found that 70
percentage
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of citizens in Vietnam chose saving in 2021. In conclusion,
although
covid-19
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is over
but
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customers
no longer paying attention to
advertise
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like before
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