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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#gym #methods
Over
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weight
 is a big problem for many people nowadays.
to
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To
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 get fit, we have many ways to
do
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, some people think that going to the
gym
 is the best
way
, but
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others claim that there are more effective methods.
This
 essay will show that gymnastics is the best choice to keep fit and take the other view about keeping fit the other
way
. On the one hand, we can buy a portion of food and drink very easily nowadays.
Also
, technology allows look at that and think it is so very modern but it can make us lazy too. The
gym
 is the best
way
 to keep fit, I said that because
it
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 more expensive than many ways, it can boost us to have the motivation to we can do better. Gymnastics can help us burn calories fast do exercising more and more. ,
,
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Moreover
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 it can help us have a nice body and balance our health.
For example
, when I was in grade 7, I went to
gym
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the gym
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 with my daddy every day and
do
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did
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the
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exercise for people under 18 so in the next month, my
weight
is
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was
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 low 1.5 kg, that
so
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is so
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 interesting.
Conversely
, we can keep fit
by
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in
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 another
way
 like
eat
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eating
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 healthy food and drinking juice more vitamin C to burn calories, but just keep it balanced because if not, we can have a problem
in
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with
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 our health. Yoga is
the
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 good choice too because it makes
we
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us
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 feel
relax
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 and
feel
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better than before they do. My mom doesn’t go to the
gym
 but she
also
 keeps her
weight
 so good, because she
do
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does
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 yoga every day. She said that she was relaxed and felt better in her health after she had done her yoga lesson. From my perspective, gymnastics is my best choice, because it
also
 boosts me to lose
weight
than
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in
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 many ways I can so
also
. When I
pay
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 for PT and
gym
fee
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, it was a lot of money and
i
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I
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 just
don’t
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didn’t
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 want to waste my money so I
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ty
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try
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 it harder,
so
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it
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It
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make
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made
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 me feel it
is
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was
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 the best
way
To conclude
, many
way
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ways
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 can keep fit but just
choose
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choosing
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the
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your
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 own
way
help
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to help
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 you feel best to get fit.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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