Being a celebrity –such as a famous film star or sports personality. Brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity bring more benefits or more problems?

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Nowadays, all over the world, being a
celebrity
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is becoming very popular.
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some
people
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think the advantages of being a
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exist, other says there are disadvantages to being a superstar. From my point of view, I think the first perspective is the most persuasive for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as far as being a
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is concerned,
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, to a large extent, no matter in the world you live
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can get notoriety and success,
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the
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that
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people
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watching you
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the television and resulting in the
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that they want to be you.
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, and most importantly for me, you can have access easily at some party or event, on account of the
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that you
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more
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and advertising, leading to enjoying easily.
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, famous
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get an invitation
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festival in France
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common
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cannot have access.
On the other hand
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, there are reasons that being a
celebrity
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has many disadvantages. First and foremost, by and large, you cannot do whatever you want
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the
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that each movement that you doing, is followed by
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peoples
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, owing to hide yourself to keep a private life.
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, when you are famous,
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following
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you everywhere and
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to catch bad pictures
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the
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gossips
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newspapers
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in newspapers
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or social media. In conclusion,
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some
people
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think that being a
celebrity
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has many advantages, others hold a different opinion. In my opinion, to some extent, the first perspective is the most persuasive for the abovementioned reasons.
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