Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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gymnastics is the greatest method to keep fit
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more productive ways.
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that gymnastics is the premier method to stay fit
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effective ways because various exercises can
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gymnastics is the best way to keep fit because of its scientific. Scientists have proved that the gym has
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of training which help your various group of muscles,
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you to control your diet scientifically.
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who regularly go to the gym usually have a nice body and healthy meals.
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free space to practice so
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more freedom than
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to the gym. For
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, running is an outdoor activity so
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they go for a run. In conclusion, I agree with
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more productive methods
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fit
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freedom.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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