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Many countries today are experiencing high levels of migration from rural areas to cities. What are the causes of this trend? and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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These days several countries are dealing with numerous migrations of
people
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 from rural areas to big towns for several reasons that can have a lot of effects on citizens. One of the most important reasons for migrating
people
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 from rural to cities is the lack of job opportunities which makes individuals move to achieve better conditions that have a negative impact on others.
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, those
people
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 move to big cities to gain better jobs which causes other
people
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 who were living there before, to lose job opportunities and the number of employees becomes more and more. Another reason for
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 trend is the existence of high-level facilities in the big towns which leads
people
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 to immigrate there for access to these possibilities that create more problems for citizens
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 as overpopulation.
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, schools that have high-quality education may have to register a lot of students out of their real capacity resulting in a decrease in education quality. These happenings can expand other to their facilities too. In conclusion, the increasing of rural
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 migrating to cities for several reasons causes high difficulties for townspeople.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural depopulation
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • livelihoods
  • overpopulation
  • cultural integration
  • affordability
  • public services
  • housing prices
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • cultural diversity
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • basic services
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