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Many feel that going to gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that the most effective way to help
people
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 keep fit is
build
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 muscles.
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, others think that
people
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has
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 more methods to help them keep in shape. In my opinion, I lean toward the latter idea and
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 writer will explain several reasons supporting my perspective. First and foremost, it is widely
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 that the best course of action to keep
in
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fit is
do
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 gymnastics. A very important point to consider is that
people
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 can lose weight in a short time,
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mean
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 that they can
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 lose weight by evident courses and a dedicated PT.
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, when citizens
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 to
gym
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the gym
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, they will have a
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 who
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conscientiously
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 to help
they
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them
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 have
a
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 best
exercise
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 for only you. Another consideration is that
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is
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 affected by the environment at
gym
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.
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because
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of
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people
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 see professional equipment and everyone
do
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exercise
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, it will make them
have
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a
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motivate
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. On the
others
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 hand, there are seawall agreements in
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 of the idea that it has more methods to help
people
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 keep healthy. They will have flexible
their
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time and do not need to spend lots
money
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of money
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.
People
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 can eat healthier to keep in trim and do a bit
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exercise
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of exercise
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 at home. A specific example of
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 is that scientifically proven that a diet is vital than
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exercise
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 for
people
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 to keep trim. In conclusion, I put more highlight on the idea that it has more ways to keep
in
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fit which can help
people
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 to manage their time and save money.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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