Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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is argue
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that major opinion approving of doing gymnastics is the best route to stay in
shape
. Others,
however
, said the better
way
to solve
this
problem. In my opinion, I totally agree with
people
going
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that going
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to
gym
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the gym
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is the best
way
to keep fit. The main reason that
people
going to the
gym
is the best
way
to keep fit is
persuaded
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that they are able to go to
gym
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the gym
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and control their weight.
Firstly
,
this
way
is the best when they are
of
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wondering if they
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idea about
stay
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fit
way
, it
also
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convinient
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convenient
and almost sufficient
in
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for
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staying in
shape
.
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, ninety per cent
people
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of people
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keeping
their
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fit
are
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is
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totally effective at all, they
also
give their opinion to their friends, the result of
that is
their weight
are be
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able to keep, too.
In
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the other hand,
people
can use the other
way
to keep in
shape
essential is that
people
have to change their
life style
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lifestyle to be
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healthier and it
necessary
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is necessary
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to
choose
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eat clean
way
. The result of
this
way
that they can
keeping
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keep
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fit stable and
also
living
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a
well
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good
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life style
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lifestyle
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to avoid getting at risk of sickness.
For example
,
people
can eat more vegetables, fresh food, fruits...
such
as tomatoes, fresh salmon, apples.. to stay fit and help their
life
healthier. In conclusion,
people
have to go to
gym
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the gym
a gym
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to keep
their
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apply
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fit effectively, because of
convinient
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convenient
convenience
and essential.
Furthermore
, they can
also
change their
life style
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lifestyle
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healthier and it
necessary
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is necessary
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to
choose
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tochoose
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eat clean
way
. But in my
way
, the best
way
to keep in
shape
that
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is that
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people
prefer doing
gymnastic
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gymnastics
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in
anyway
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any way
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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