Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
It
is argue
that major opinion approving of doing gymnastics is the best route to stay in Change the verb form
is argued
shape
. Others, however
, said the better way
to solve this
problem. In my opinion, I totally agree with people
going
to Correct word choice
that going
gym
is the best Add an article
the gym
way
to keep fit.
The main reason that people
going to the gym
is the best way
to keep fit is persuaded
that they are able to go to Verb problem
apply
gym
and control their weight. Add an article
the gym
Firstly
, this
way
is the best when they are of
wondering if they Change preposition
apply
do not have no
idea about Rewrite the sentence
do not have any
have no
stay
fit Change the form of the verb
staying
way
, it also
Add a missing verb
is also
convinient
and almost sufficient Correct your spelling
convenient
in
staying in Change preposition
for
shape
. For example
, ninety per cent people
keeping Change preposition
of people
their
fit Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
totally effective at all, they Correct subject-verb agreement
is
also
give their opinion to their friends, the result of that is
their weight are be
able to keep, too.
Verb problem
apply
In
the other hand, Change preposition
On
people
can use the other way
to keep in shape
essential is that people
have to change their life style
healthier and it Correct your spelling
lifestyle to be
necessary
to Add a missing verb
is necessary
choose
eat clean Add the particle
tochoose
way
. The result of this
way
that they can keeping
fit stable and Change the verb form
keep
be keeping
also
living
a Wrong verb form
live
well
Change the adverb
good
life style
to avoid getting at risk of sickness. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
For example
, people
can eat more vegetables, fresh food, fruits... such
as tomatoes, fresh salmon, apples.. to stay fit and help their life
healthier.
In conclusion, people
have to go to gym
to keep Add an article
the gym
a gym
their
fit effectively, because of Correct pronoun usage
apply
convinient
and essential. Correct your spelling
convenient
convenience
Furthermore
, they can also
change their life style
healthier and it Correct your spelling
lifestyle
necessary
to Add a missing verb
is necessary
choose
eat clean Add the particle
tochoose
way
. But in my way
, the best way
to keep in shape
that
Add a missing verb
is that
people
prefer doing gymnastic
in Fix the agreement mistake
gymnastics
anyway
.Replace the word
any way
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