the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

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The given line graph provides information regarding the percentage of total population in the

Philippines

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Malaysia

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, Thailand, and Indonesia in a 50-year period from 1970 to 2020, and

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with anticipation for 2030 and 2040. It is noticeable to see that the trend is upward in all four

countries

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and they will have risen more in the future. In 1970, both

Malaysia

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and

Philippines

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populations were nearly 30%, and during the 10-year period,

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figure grew for

Malaysia

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by 10%,

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it did not change significantly in the

Philippines

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. From 1990 to 2020, the percentage of residents in

Malaysia

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increased steadily, reaching 80%,

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the figure fluctuated in the

Philippines

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however

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, the trend was upward. From 2020 onwards, these two figures will have grown in both

countries

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. The percentages of population were lower in Indonesia and Thailand than in two other

countries

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in 1970 and were roughly 15% and 19% respectively. During the following 50 years, these two figures climbed in the mentioned

countries

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, there was a significant increase in the percentage of Indonesia's population of 50%, but the figure rose slightly in Thailand, reaching 30%.

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, there will have been a level-up in these figures from 2020 to 2040.

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the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

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