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the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
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The given line graph provides information regarding the percentage of total population in the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and Indonesia in a 50-year period from 1970 to 2020, and
also
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 with anticipation for 2030 and 2040. It is noticeable to see that the trend is upward in all four
countries
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 and they will have risen more in the future. In 1970, both
Malaysia
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 and
Philippines
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 populations were nearly 30%, and during the 10-year period,
this
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 figure grew for
Malaysia
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 by 10%,
while
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 it did not change significantly in the
Philippines
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. From 1990 to 2020, the percentage of residents in
Malaysia
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 increased steadily, reaching 80%,
whereas
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 the figure fluctuated in the
Philippines
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,
however
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, the trend was upward. From 2020 onwards, these two figures will have grown in both
countries
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. The percentages of population were lower in Indonesia and Thailand than in two other
countries
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 in 1970 and were roughly 15% and 19% respectively. During the following 50 years, these two figures climbed in the mentioned
countries
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.
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, there was a significant increase in the percentage of Indonesia's population of 50%, but the figure rose slightly in Thailand, reaching 30%.
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, there will have been a level-up in these figures from 2020 to 2040.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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