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Some people believe that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit, others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by many
people
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 that attending the
gym
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 is the best
way
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 to stay in shape, but others hold the view that there are more
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way
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 that are effectual. Though
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 going to the
gym
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 is a good
way
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 for
people
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 to keep fit, I completely agree that there are some effective
methods
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. First of all, the main reason that explains why
people
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 think that a
gym
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 is the best
way
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 to keep fit is it is a priority choice for many individuals.
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 is true because
people
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 nowadays tend to upgrade the facilities of the
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 rooms and attending the
gym
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 is much cheaper compared to most other
methods
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. In fact,
people
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 are likely to spend as little money as they can on something, unless it is necessary.
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, most
people
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 will choose the
gym
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 as the place where they can stay fit.
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, the reason why I agree is that there are many other
methods
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 that are
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 really effective like
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Yoga, Aerobics and so forth.
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 is because many MIQs stay in shape thanks to Yoga and their diet,
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 on each person’s lifestyle, and how many calories they spend, they can choose one of those
methods
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. To summarise, though, though many
people
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 think that attending the
gym
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 is the best
way
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 to stay in shape that many
people
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 choose
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, I totally agree that there are many effective
methods
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such
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 as Yoga, Aerobics and so on
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