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Some people believe that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit, others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by many
people
 that attending the
gym
 is the best
way
 to stay in shape, but others hold the view that there are more
way
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 that are effectual. Though
,
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 going to the
gym
 is a good
way
 for
people
 to keep fit, I completely agree that there are some effective
methods
. First of all, the main reason that explains why
people
 think that a
gym
 is the best
way
 to keep fit is it is a priority choice for many individuals.
This
 is true because
people
 nowadays tend to upgrade the facilities of the
gym
 rooms and attending the
gym
 is much cheaper compared to most other
methods
. In fact,
people
 are likely to spend as little money as they can on something, unless it is necessary.
For example
, most
people
 will choose the
gym
 as the place where they can stay fit.
However
, the reason why I agree is that there are many other
methods
 that are
also
 really effective like
as
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Yoga, Aerobics and so forth.
This
 is because many MIQs stay in shape thanks to Yoga and their diet,
depends
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 on each person’s lifestyle, and how many calories they spend, they can choose one of those
methods
. To summarise, though, though many
people
 think that attending the
gym
 is the best
way
 to stay in shape that many
people
 choose
that
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, I totally agree that there are many effective
methods
such
 as Yoga, Aerobics and so on

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