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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods Discuss both view and give your own opinion

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It is considered by some
people
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 that the best way of
stay
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 healthy is
go
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to go
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 to
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gym
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the gym
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 house. Whilst others disagree and hold a view that there
is
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 a lot of positive
methods
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 different
with
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 the
gym
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 that they can choose.
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 there are many
methods
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 to choose
, I
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 agree that travel to the
gym
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 will help
we
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us
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 stay healthy. On the one hand, there are many
methods
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can
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 be chosen to stay fit,
this
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 is true because most
methods
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 we use to stay fit nowadays
is
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 not
or
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different
with
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from
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 the
gym
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.
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,
go
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 biking and parking is the most used
methods
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 all over the world, when
people
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 go parking, they can get more positive heart effect or keep
body
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the body
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 fit and they do not need to pay for
the
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a
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gym
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 membership, so there are many positive
methods
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people
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 can choose to get a healthy body.
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, I hold the view that the best way to stay in shape is
visit
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 to the
gym
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,
this
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 is true because
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gym
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the gym
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 is more professional than public
methods
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,
this
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 is true because when
people
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 purchase
membership
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a membership
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 from the
gym
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, they can visit
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gym
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the gym
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 as a member and stay healthy by using
gym
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’s facilities.
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, when
people
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 have a membership, they can stay
heathy
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healthy
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 with
another
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other
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people
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 including
teacher
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teachers
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 who have
a
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the
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 skills to keep fit and support them
how
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in how
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 to use
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gym’s
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the gym’s
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 facilities, so
go
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going
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 to the
gym
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 to stay fit is
more
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easier than public
methods
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. In conclusion, though using public
methods
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 will help
people
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 stay in shape
due to
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 most public
methods
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 is free to use, I believe that the best way to keep fit is going to the
gym
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due to
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gym’s
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the gym’s
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 facilities and
good
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a good
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 teacher.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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