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Many people feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #gym #methods
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People
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 argue that the best way to keep fit
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 going to the
gym
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.
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 others believe that there are some more convenient ways. In my opinion, I agree with those
people
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 who think that there are some more effective methods than going to the
gym
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. The reason why
people
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 believe that going to the
gym
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 is the best way to keep fit is visiting the
gym
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 can give us opportunities to use the professional facilities which can be provided at the
gym
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, and we can use those stuff
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 to keep our body
in
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fit.
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, we can do dumbbells or lifting in gyms. Some
people
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 agree that there are more effective methods that can make them stay in shape, and I agree with
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 because it is free,
safe
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 and it can improve our communication skills.
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 is true because we can do anything we like outside the
gym
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.
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, we can talk to
people
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 with
same
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 interests or do some outdoor activities without paying
fee
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a fee
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,
while
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 some individuals think that going to the
gym
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 is the best way to stay in shape, I agree with those
people
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 who believe that there are better and more effective methods.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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