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Many people feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #gym #methods
People
 argue that the best way to keep fit
by
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is by
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 going to the
gym
.
While
 others believe that there are some more convenient ways. In my opinion, I agree with those
people
 who think that there are some more effective methods than going to the
gym
. The reason why
people
 believe that going to the
gym
 is the best way to keep fit is visiting the
gym
 can give us opportunities to use the professional facilities which can be provided at the
gym
, and we can use those stuff
as well as
 to keep our body
in
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fit.
For example
, we can do dumbbells or lifting in gyms. Some
people
 agree that there are more effective methods that can make them stay in shape, and I agree with
this
 because it is free,
safe
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 and it can improve our communication skills.
This
 is true because we can do anything we like outside the
gym
.
For instance
, we can talk to
people
 with
same
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the same
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 interests or do some outdoor activities without paying
fee
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a fee
the fee
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.
To conclude
,
while
 some individuals think that going to the
gym
 is the best way to stay in shape, I agree with those
people
 who believe that there are better and more effective methods.
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