The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.
The table illustrates the proportion of possers of mobile phones using different mobile
phone
features in Vietnam in the years 2005, 2008 and 2010.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the proportion of people using make calls was the highest , while
the
percentage of take photos was the smallest. Capitalize word
The
Moreover
,the percentage of all types of mobile phone
features decreased, except taking photos.
Firstly
, the using of make calls had the highest percentage, namely 100%. Moreover
, it maintained the same level in 2005 and 2008. However
, in 2010 it fell to 97% and was the biggest used type of mobile phone
. Secondly
, the usage of taking photos was 65% , before going up to 70% in 2008.
Furthermore
, it rose moderately to 77% in 2010, but it was the lowest using type of mobile phone
over the period in question.
With regards to sending and receiving text messages, it was approximately 82%, but it dropped to 73 % in 2008 . Therefore
, it decreased to 5% compared to 2008, roughly 68%. The figure for record studios,accounted for 78%, before decreasing to 75%. However
, it went down to 63% in the final years.Submitted by dimash171206 on
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