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Some people beleive that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime.Others,however argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it,should alwas be taken into account when deciding on the punishment Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is thought by certain individuals that severe punishments are required to
be carry
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 out in order to reduce illegal activities
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 others
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 it should be carefully considered before charging for a
crimnal
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criminal
act
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.
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agree
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 with the latter so that society would be a more
pleasent
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pleasant
 place to live. One of the key
point
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 is that it is vital to raise awareness among citizens through
goverment
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government
 initiatives about
crime
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 punishment.They should be informed that there will be
a suitable consequences
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suitable consequences
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 for their criminal
act
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deliquents
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delinquents
delinquent
 would have the
oppourtunites
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opportunity
 to refrain themselves.It is clearly seen that most criminal who has been to jail
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 regretful for their criminal
act
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 after they have been to jail.Increased awareness amongst the general population would assist in lowering
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crime
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 rate. Despite
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, social inequality still
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 in the modern world.These suggestions may not have the ideal effect.
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, there is a significant wealth divide in many populations which
motivate
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 individuals to resort to criminal activities in order to support themselves and their families.
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,
crime
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 can
be
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a
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result
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 the most appealing option for
lower class
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 citizens with the objective of survival. In conclusion, to prevent
crime
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 severe punishment is
neccessary
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necessary
 as a
deterant
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deterrent
 and suitable
consequences
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 for many
criminal
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criminals
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however
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 it is worth noticing that not every
crimnal
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criminal
act
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 are the result of misbehaviour
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therefore
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 require careful consideration before charging for a
crime
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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