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Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge or experience. I'm

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Some
people
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 believe that the
internet
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 will increasingly be used for giving
information
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 to the world.
This
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 condition will change the spread of
information
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 from
newspapers
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 or
magazines
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 to online
media
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 or the
internet
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. There are several aspects that lead
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 transformation
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 as the
internet
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 itself and the society.
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, there will be positive and negative points of the
internet
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. The transformation of
media
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 is rapidly changing today. It happens because some
people
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 usually use their gadgets to do everything. Their mobile phones or computers can be used as
newspapers
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, game consoles, cameras, and so on. Those activities lead
people
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 too lazy to do other tasks without gadgets. Those things are using the
internet
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 network to access
information
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. They can read everything online on the
internet
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 without changing the
media
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 (
newspapers
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 or
magazines
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 or everything).
This
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 situation gives
people
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 the easiest way to search for news or
information
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.
On the other hand
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, the usage of the
internet
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 can decrease paper consumption and save our environment.
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,
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 condition will affect the job vacancies in the
media
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.
People
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 who usually sell
newspapers
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 will disappear. They will be substituted by web application portals on the
internet
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.
Media
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 companies should try to develop other opportunities for job vacancies. They should open huge vacancies for
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 who want to work in their companies.
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,
people
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 can join the company to maintain some digital properties on the
internet
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.
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, everybody can become a digital content writer or creator so it will increase their income too. In conclusion, I believe that
people
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 will use the
internet
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 for reading news and
information
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. There will be the best way for
people
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 to get something interesting too.
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, the usage of
newspapers
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 and
magazines
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 will be shifted to online
media
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such
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 as web application portals, online
magazines
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, online
media
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, and many more.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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