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Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge or experience. I'm

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Some
people
 believe that the
internet
 will increasingly be used for giving
information
 to the world.
This
 condition will change the spread of
information
 from
newspapers
 or
magazines
 to online
media
 or the
internet
. There are several aspects that lead
this
 transformation
such
 as the
internet
 itself and the society.
Finally
, there will be positive and negative points of the
internet
. The transformation of
media
 is rapidly changing today. It happens because some
people
 usually use their gadgets to do everything. Their mobile phones or computers can be used as
newspapers
, game consoles, cameras, and so on. Those activities lead
people
 too lazy to do other tasks without gadgets. Those things are using the
internet
 network to access
information
. They can read everything online on the
internet
 without changing the
media
 (
newspapers
 or
magazines
 or everything).
This
 situation gives
people
 the easiest way to search for news or
information
.
On the other hand
, the usage of the
internet
 can decrease paper consumption and save our environment.
On the contrary
,
this
 condition will affect the job vacancies in the
media
.
People
 who usually sell
newspapers
 will disappear. They will be substituted by web application portals on the
internet
.
Media
 companies should try to develop other opportunities for job vacancies. They should open huge vacancies for
people
 who want to work in their companies.
For example
,
people
 can join the company to maintain some digital properties on the
internet
.
Then
, everybody can become a digital content writer or creator so it will increase their income too. In conclusion, I believe that
people
 will use the
internet
 for reading news and
information
. There will be the best way for
people
 to get something interesting too.
Finally
, the usage of
newspapers
 and
magazines
 will be shifted to online
media
such
 as web application portals, online
magazines
, online
media
, and many more.
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