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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1 Writing

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1 Writing
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The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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,
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apply
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 the
amount
 of
visitors
for
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to
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 a museum in the UK in two seasons (
summer
 and winter) in 2003.
Overall
, the number of
visitors
 in
summer
more
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is more
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 than
winter
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in winter
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.
Furthermore
,
visitors
 prefer visiting the museum between 9:00 am and 12:00 pm and
this
amount
 decreased after the mid-day. With regards to the
amount
 of
visitors
 in
summer
, it began from 9:00 am and climbed rapidly to reach around 1300
visitors
 at 10:00 am. Between 10:00 am and 12:00 pm, there is a slight increase in number of
visitors
 at around 1500 which is the highest
amount
 in
summer
 before falling gradually after 12:00 pm to 16:00 pm,
then
 drop dramatically before closing at 18:00 pm.
On the other hand
, the number of
visitors
 in winter fluctuated at around 450 to 550
visitors
 from 9:00 am to almost 11:30 am.
This
 figure, decreased from 12:00 pm to 14:30 pm
then
 remain stable to 18:00pm.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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