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The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the amount of
people
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 who do 4 different kinds of sports in a particular section from the year 1985 to 2005, in a period of 20 years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of
people
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 who play rugby showed an evident downward trend ,
while
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 a consistent increase in the number of
people
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 who play tennis took place during
this
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 period.
To begin
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 with, there were the most
people
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 who played rugby in 1985, with approximately 250, followed by a dramatic drop to reach the lowest level over the next 20-year period, with a mere 50.
On the contrary
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, starting from 150
people
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 playing tennis,
this
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 figure grew sharply to a peak of nearly 225, which was seven times doubling those playing rugby in 2005.
On the other hand
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, the number of
people
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 that play basketball was around 25 more than those playing badminton.
Subsequently
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, both numbers remained stable in the following years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • stable
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • significant change
  • regional popularity
  • time period
  • sports activities
  • data representation
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