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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Recently,
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 have been used everywhere by
people
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 and have become a popular topic. Many
people
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 think that using mobile phone damage
people
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 like smoking and it is worth discussing.
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, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether
People
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 should be banned from using
phones
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 in some places like smoking or not. Whatever each side of the argument thinks, I strongly agree that mobile
phones
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 must be forbidden in certain places. There are many reasons why ı think so.
To begin
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 with, bonds between
people
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 break down by mobile
phones
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, especially communication.
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, sometimes, they can not listen to each other and they play only on
phones
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. Nowadays, we look around, and the
people
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 in the cafe chatting less than in the past. Another reason for
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 is that several information like secrets can be shared with other
people
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 or another country. A good example of
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 is that, in exam time some students take a picture of the exam paper via
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 and send their friends.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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 oppose my idea. First of all, They can find beneficial material for
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.
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, it is not only important for
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 but
also
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 it is a huge invention for the world
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 mobile
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 offering
people
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 many opportunities.
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,
people
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 know the daily news even instantly new thanks to mobile
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.
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, Sometimes they get bored with the environment or
people
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, friends, and daily life.
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, the phone gives
people
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 enjoyable activities,
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 as playing games and watching movies
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also
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 whenever they want, they access it.
To sum up
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, in spite of the fact that mobile
phones
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 help
people
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 in many fields, they are very dangerous in certain places.
In addition
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, we need to know where and how to use it.
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