Many museums charge for admission while orthers are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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for not only the government but
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either who is wealthy or poor.
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will explain clearly . There are numerous advantages why charging
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and foremost, if we give money to the
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opportunity to watch anything because when
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different types of things because
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country folk will take more interest.
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instance, in
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entry and they enjoy
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the other hand, why musuem should be free as there are some
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who are poor in our country and they can not afford too much fees
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museums
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free for every individual
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see their ancient culture
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illustrate, in my country , there are few
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that are free where
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conclusion,
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museum
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provide
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still
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, charging
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can renovate
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all the old things that would not
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