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It is very expensive to restore old buildings,and it would be better to spend this money on new houses .To what extent do you agree ?

#buildings #money #houses
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Nowadays, Old
buildings
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restore
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price is
very
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 expensive than new
houses
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. I agree with the topic. Because these days, all material & and goods price is very high. I will discuss the topic.
To begin
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 with, these days, many
people
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 build a new
house
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instead
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 of repairing their old
house
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.
In addition
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, Some
people
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 like to repair their old
house
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 .Because it is their grandparent'
house
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 or being other reasons. But nowadays ,all inradius are very expensive
such
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 as
,
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cement ,metal, wood, furniture and other types of equipment.
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, most
people
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 like to build a modern
house
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. From time to time housing plans change in our societies.
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 younger adults would like to purchase a new home
instead
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 of repairing the old building. 
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, old
houses
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 are
very
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much
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big
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bigger
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rather
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apply
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than modern
houses
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. Because in the past, many extended families lived in the
house
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.
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 four or five bedrooms,two living,big kitchen were included in that
house
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.The old
house
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 repair is very risky in our society. Another thing,
money
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 and time are wasted
for
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 restoring old Building. ,
Currently
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 all
people
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 do have not a lot of
money
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. Because the world economy is very critical.
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, they do not like to spend more
money
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 on old
buildings
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. After that, most
people
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 like to build modern style
houses
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as well as
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 small spaces
house
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 many
people
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 living busy lifestyle
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therefore
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 they do not like to clean more spaces.
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people
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 think the old building is not good and they
are moving
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move
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 to new
buildings
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.  In Conclusion. I believe that
,
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apply
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 old
house
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reparing
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repair
 is more expensive than new
buildings
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. Because
,
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 its building is very old and a lot of damages have in
this
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buildings
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. A lot of
money
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invest
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is invested
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 in the repair of the old home .
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 It is better to replace the
money
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 for the new building
instead
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 of repairing the old
buildings
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Architectural style
  • Craftsmanship
  • Sustainable
  • Minimize
  • Energy efficiency
  • Housing shortages
  • Affordable options
  • Stimulate local economies
  • Tourism
  • Restoration industries
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