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The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990

The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990
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The pie chart illustrates the most important
sources
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 related to
energy
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 in the United States in the years 1980 and 1990.
Overall
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, in the United
States
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,States
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 the majority of
sources
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 of
energy
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 are produced by the
Oil
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 and
gas
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 industry which is known as fuel, Diesel, and
gas
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-liquid petroleum.
Conversely
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, Coal, hydroelectric
power
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 and hydroelectric
power
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 have a low
percentage
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 which means that they were not used at all in 1980 and 1990 respectively. In 1980 and 1990
oil
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 and natural
gas
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is
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 the principal
sources
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 of
energy
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.
However
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, in 1980
oil
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 and
gas
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energy
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 had 42% and 26 respectively. Unfortunately, in 1990 the
percentage
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 is lower than in 1980 with 25% and 33% for
oil
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 and
gas
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 respectively. There is a reduction of about 9% and 1% respectively.
Sources
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 of
energy
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 like coal, hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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 have the lowest
percentage
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 of use in the USA with 22%, 5%, and 5% respectively in 1980.
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, in 1990 there was an important growth in coal and nuclear
power
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 about 5% and 5% respectively. Hydroelectric
power
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 had the same
percentage
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 in either 1980 or 1990
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, oil, gas, power, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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